We Are All Actors

Hey guys this is Kat “Comic Uno”. I made a story for my creative writing class and think it came out pretty well. So, I decided to share it on Comic Frontline. Please give me feedback on what to change and what you like about the story. Thank you!

“We are all actors just playing our
parts. Going crazy is just having a wide imagination. I am just playing my part
in the grand scheme of things. I am only here to entertain.”
            They say that he killed dozens. He
is a psychotic serial killer. I don’t remember the medical term they told me in
the past. The simple definition is that he can’t feel for others and he has no
remorse for his crimes. To me he is just my little brother.
I was able to leave my kids with my
husband. I wanted to see my little brother for the last time. I walk into
Bellevue Hospital. The sign I see while driving “Bellevue Hospital- A Hospital
for the Criminally Insane”. Before I know it I am walking the hallway to my
brother’s fully padded room. The walk seems longer than usual. Maybe because I
realize that this will be the last time I will be able to see my brother before
he is given the death sentence.
            I never thought my brother would
ever end up in a place like this. He never showed any signs of evil. There were
no signs that he would kill dozens of innocent people. He was just my little
brother that I always was too overprotective with.
Growing up he didn’t have many friends.
He always wanted to sit in the corner and read his books. I still thought we
were close. He would always talk to me like he cared. The doctor says that
psychopaths are the best actors. I just can’t accept that our relationship was
a lie.
I go up to the front desk and I show my
identification. They let me in. I thought I would be able to see him in his
room, but the nurse leads me into a different room. My brother is now set in an
interrogation room. This will be the last place that he will have a
conversation with someone. That last person will be me.
I drag a metal chair to the table. It
screeches the ground and leaves black scuffmarks on the perfectly white floor.
I see his face, and see two different things. My brother is in their somewhere,
but what shows from his lack of facial expression is the killer I don’t want to
I hear the chains of his cuffs coming
lose. The guards seem to be ignoring the problem.
brother asks me, “Why did you come here?”
tell him, “I care about you, and I don’t think you did those crimes. I promise
I am going to try and clear your name.”
 He says, “It’s too late. You can’t change what
has been done. I am only an actor in the grand scheme of things. The actor
accomplished the final act that everyone wanted to see, but was too scared to
admit it.”
cry to him, “You must have been forced. My little brother would never harm a
fly. Who made you do this?”
brother smirks, “You don’t quite understand. I had no motive and nobody forces
me to do anything. I make my own decisions. Nothing is painted in black and
white. I am gray.”
My brother breaks out of his chains and
he starts to strangle me. Everything starts to go black. I am wondering why the
guards are not trying to prevent this. Are they entertained? The last thought I
have was they are just actors playing their part….
….I wake up in a white padded room.
guard tells me that my brother is here to see me. I realize that my imagination
has gotten the best of me once again. That is how I ended up here in the first
place. I put on a fake smile, which I know how to do so well. I have been
practicing it for years. It makes me seem like a real person of society that
can play well with others.
            My brother, wearing a perfectly
crisp business suit, moves a metal chair to the table. It screeches the ground
and leaves black scuffmarks on the perfectly white floor. He looks at my face
and I wear the same fake smile I have been wearing for years.
            He starts to talk to me, but I don’t
hear a word. It seems like he cares. I wish I could return the favor, but I
never cared about him. He should take my place. Why does he deserve to have the
perfect job with the perfect family? Is this how life works? This doesn’t fit
the grand scheme of things. My cuffs start to come lose.
            I ignore what my brother says, but
one thing sticks with me.
says, “I always wanted to care for you sis. Even tried getting you help over
the years, but I do believe you did this. I don’t understand why you do these
things. Did this give you pleasure? I so sorry it had to be this way.”
tell him with the straightest face, “I want to tell you why I do the things I
do, but you wouldn’t understand. No one understands.”
last thing I say is, “We are all actors just playing our parts. Going crazy is
just having a wide imagination. I am just playing my part in the grand scheme
of things. I am only here to entertain”
brother looks confused and replies, “This is not some sort of game. You always
thought life was a game, but life is precious. Can’t you see that now?”
saw the tears in his eyes. I pity how naive he is. 
guards pull me away. I know my destiny, and for the next few hours the law
pulls my strings. I become a puppet to society. 

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6 Thoughts to “We Are All Actors”

  1. Interesting read. It's very rare to find female serial killers so that point of view is certainly a different take. Thanks for the read!

  2. Jay

    Great job Kat! I really like the twist, and how you didn't try to humanize the main character. Usually these types of stories try to make the killer a bit human but I like that you went the opposite way. Great job!

  3. on the 4th sentence of the 6th paragraph where you wrote " my brother is in THEIR somewhere" instead of THERE…I really enjoyed this short story. maybe in the future I'll be in Barnes& nobles in the thriller section looking for one of your books!

    1. Thank you for the correction. I am sure there are some little grammar mistakes here and there.

  4. Oh wow, this is a very dark story, a sad story. I must say you have a wild imagination and people say comics and TV are a waste of time. But watching TV I think can indirectly give you a sixth sense on elements of a good story like, story pacing, suspense, characterization, drama and other aspects which I did pick up in your story. I like the poetry of it. I liked that the story starts with a quote about "actors playing parts" and the theme pops up again later in story.

    I agree with Jay. I thought the twist with the protagonist who actually turned out to be the troubled sibling. The switch reminded me a lot of the movie Fight Club where the main character turns out to be monster all along. I can also like how the up and down nature of sibling dynamics was touched upon in the story, I'm sure a lot of folks can relate to that. Also the theme of good and evil was once again touched on in your story and I like when the character said he was gray.

    If I had to critique it the only things I would change is that the twist happens at the very end, to the leave the audience in shock and then nothing eles, to leave them totally a gasp. And getting back to the poetry theme you had that great quote in the beginning if it could come full circle and have that quote somehow referred to again in the end it would really knock em dead.

    All in all, I think all the TV and Comics you have consumed have given you a unique education in storytelling and could be your secret weapon. You have the makings of a very promising story teller and please share more work on Comic Frontline Fiction.

  5. Glad to hear you enjoyed the story and I agree with you I think watching television and reading comic books over the years has helped me as a writer.

    Thank you for your critique I will def keep it in mind because I understand what you are saying with the shock factor. =)

    Also want to mention about the quote. When people read this story a lot of people ask me if where I grabbed the quote. I actually created it for the story =)

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